Paris+Poem

Wake Me Up in Paris

Wisps of steam wafting from the mug du café Drift into the atmosphere, mixing with the sounds of accordion music and laughter on the street, Filling the air with an aroma that could only be described as home. //Parce-que Paris chez-moi//. [Because Paris is my home].

Outside is the Seine where lovers sit in intimate moments Share a kiss, or two, in the Spring air Before drifting down to a //jardin//, [garden] Taking in the fresh scents of newly budded tulips and soaking in the streaks of sunlight filtering through the canopy. Basking in the quiet sanctuary of the city and the feeling of new love. //Il s’aime et elle s’aime, l’amour et printemps sont dans l’air.// [He loves her and she loves him, love and spring is in the air.]

I mosey up the hills and steeples of Montmarte carrying me toward the precipice of the city. A safe haven away from the bustle of Charles de Gaulle Etoile. A refuge for //artistes// [artists], who set up shop on cobblestone sidewalks, Capturing the beauty of Paris from above As if they’re angels in heaven, watching over and creating the beauty of the city.

Down the slope, the carousel spins blurring my vision, turning order into chaos. the carnival tune ringing in my ears, the bustle of the city muted. I am a bird perched on the lamplight. I am a gargoyle on the steeple of Notre Dame. Suspended above the city, La villes des lumières [the city of lights] ignites my soul.

The stanza highlighted is the one that I think needs the most editing and I'm not sure if it fits with the rest of the poem. My other concern with the poem is I'm not sure if there is a clear message in it. Also in the final poem I'm not going to have the English translations of the french in it, I just put that there for now in case people wanted to know what it meant. :)

TAYLOR: o hot dam!!!! THIS POEM IS SO BEAUTIFUL LAURA. I reallly love the part where you said where lovers sit in intimate moments- because its cool too imagine that they are sitting in the moment, and I can almost picture it.

Also in general I love how you use french words.. I feel like you almost shouldnt tell people what it means so they have to discover it.. IDK. I JUST LOOOVED IT!!
plus i think you should take out the highlighted part all together cause when I read it I thought that the other part was the end. It is a good ending already, so I say just take that partt out.