Rachel+Gold

=Hello Hipzone United!=

My name is Rachel Feinberg, my writing name is Rachel Gold (Gold is my middle name), and I am writing a young adult fantasy novel. I've been writing it since the 8th grade so some of my writing might seem a little out dated, and a little dramatic (remember I was 14 when I started this). So I would like you to just give me some feed back on whether or not you think the dialogue is realistic, if you understand what's going on in the chapter, and some other suggestions. I'll start it off by posting the first page of the first chapter, and hopefully I'll remember to continue uploading more pages. Thanks! //End blurb.//

=[|HEY GUYS THE FIRST CHAPTER OF MY BOOK IS NOW ON TEENINK.COM]= = = ===**Magically my book has been voted to #33 in the top voted novels, I think I'll add another chapter.** ===